Peer Review 8

Wow Annabelle!
Your poem this week was beautifully written and flowed very nicely. It was really interesting to read about your experiences due to not being able to communicate in the languages of your heritage as I have not had similar feelings to you in my life. I really like the concept you have presented that language grants access to all cultural experiences such as food, dancing and new people as it acknowledges the great importance language has and the true extent of the impact it has on identity. The only piece of advice I have is that in some lines, your rhyme seems to be more for the sake of rhyming than adding to your poem- for example culture/vulture as I do not understand the deeper purpose or meaning of the use of the word “vulture” in the context of the line.
All the best for the completion of your blog!

Posted to: https://annabellebarnslicha.wordpress.com

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Peer Review 7

Hi Daniel,
I really enjoyed your letter to George Orwell in your blog this week! I think your interpretation of Orwell’s message is interesting in the way that you say he teaches us that taking care in our use of the English language can shape the future however, I think he goes much deeper than that. I feel that his essay is more about the dangers of using the English language in particular ways such as to exclude people, to enforce standards upon people and to demonstrate power over others. I did like your example of the shorthand text language often used today as it is definitely used to exclude others, mostly due to generational difference.
Keep up the good work!

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Peer Review 6

Hi Marija,
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem adapted from Sassoon this week; you incorporated his first line very smoothly into your own poem. I especially liked the parallels you drew between fireworks on New Years and life in the trenches- it is almost as if the noise from the fireworks is the same noise made by warfare but in such different contexts. Only tip I have for you is to make sure you proof read for any small typos- I think that maybe when you wrote “inexperiences souls” you meant “inexperienced”?
Best of luck πŸ˜€

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Peer Review 5

Hi Suzanne,
I really enjoyed your letter to Virginia Woolfe this week and the way you so thorougly explored and analysed her perspectives presented in the essay. I particularly like the way that you summarised her longing for “real” characters as the recognition of “complexities of the human psyche” as often characters are two dimensional due to the author restraining their true creativity; instead favouring whatever will help them become popular fiction. One suggestion I have for you is to elaborate a little more in your final paragraphs as, while I agree that the statment made by Woolfe is insightful, it would be interesting to know what specifically about the line captures your attention.
Keep up the amazing work πŸ™‚

Posted to: https://suzannes2016.wordpress.com

Peer Review 4

Hi Tabitha!
I found your blog very interesting this week and like the ideas you presented in regards to T S Eliot’s poem. I specifically liked your explanation of how one moment can completely change the path of our lives depending on a decision that we make- I agree with this and have often thought about whether I would be a completely different person if I had made a different choice in any small dilemma I have had in my life. One thing that could improve this entry is an elaboration on your own experiences; instead of telling us that you have had an experience like this, show us! It would be interesting to hear about your experiences and how these allowed you to relate to Prufrock.
Best of luck with the rest of your blogs πŸ™‚

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Peer Review 3

Hi Paul!
I found your blog post this week to be very interesting to read, especially the beautiful language used when recollecting your “special event”. I completely agree with your sentiments you expressed when opening your blog post as when writing about an event in my life, I also felt like it was in no way spectacular; especially in the eyes of other readers. I think it is important for all of us to remember that what is life changing for one person, may mean nothing to another- much like in Kat and Paul’s goose roasting. It’s always a great oppertunity to read another persons experiences, especially when they are written as poetically as yours was!
Keep up the amazing work πŸ™‚

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Peer Review 2

Hey Ronny,

Great work on the blog post- I admire your understanding of the importance of addressing the here and now and the way that life experiences alter this. I think we could learn a thing or two from the worldview presented by Baumer as we often get caught up in the past or spend too much time worrying about the future to really appreciate the present world and in turn, life itself. It would be interesting to look deeper into the opposing side of this too however; the fact that for some, the horrors of war leave them trapped in the past due to the horrific and traumatic experiences. One small suggestion I have for you is to take a look at your formatting- make sure you unitalicise the text for the rest of your response after the quote you included.

Keep up the good work πŸ™‚

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Peer Review 1

Hi Victoria!
First of all, I love the layout of your blog, it really adds something to the words you are writing. I really enjoyed your analysis of the various purposes for which people create art and the fact that sometimes it can be used to manipulate or make a person think a particular way. When it comes to the purpose that Hopkins addresses in β€œGod’s Grandeur”, I do not think it is just another purpose to add to the list. I think that it is quite possibly fundamental to art itself as if a piece can not make one stop and think, is it really effective in achieving any one of its purposes? Let me know what you think about this!

Keep up the great work πŸ™‚

Posted to: https://vbravosite.wordpress.com