Peer Review 8

Wow Annabelle!
Your poem this week was beautifully written and flowed very nicely. It was really interesting to read about your experiences due to not being able to communicate in the languages of your heritage as I have not had similar feelings to you in my life. I really like the concept you have presented that language grants access to all cultural experiences such as food, dancing and new people as it acknowledges the great importance language has and the true extent of the impact it has on identity. The only piece of advice I have is that in some lines, your rhyme seems to be more for the sake of rhyming than adding to your poem- for example culture/vulture as I do not understand the deeper purpose or meaning of the use of the word “vulture” in the context of the line.
All the best for the completion of your blog!

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