I thoroughly enjoyed your poem adapted from Sassoon this week; you incorporated his first line very smoothly into your own poem. I especially liked the parallels you drew between fireworks on New Years and life in the trenches- it is almost as if the noise from the fireworks is the same noise made by warfare but in such different contexts. Only tip I have for you is to make sure you proof read for any small typos- I think that maybe when you wrote “inexperiences souls” you meant “inexperienced”?
Best of luck 😀
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